Pirates of Somalia
Adonai, God, and Allah
Oil rivers flow through Afghan veins,
I pray that we come together.
Janjaweed in North Sudan
America unite, “Yes we can”
Tibetan dreams on far away seas,
I beg us to come together.
Rape screams silent in the Congo
A whole world aware, that pretends to not know
Children mourn to diamonds of Sierra-Leone,
We have no choice but to come together.
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I like the first three lines, but the 4th line doesn't make sense with them. I think the words "come together" are what through it off. I know what you're saying, but I think you need to emphasize come together in a sense of workign together and finding peace with each other. Find the right words.
Good allusions.
I think this like would work better in reverse: "Rape screams silent" could be "silent rape screams."
Very nice: "A whole world aware, that pretends to not know"
I'd like to see one more stanza. Perhaps include some of the issues faced in South America or Russia or even the US and Europe to make your poem seem more global.
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